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Hey there future college star! If you’re embarking on the college application journey, you know how overwhelming it can get. One misstep in your essay, and it’s a one-way ticket to the “maybe” pile.
As someone who’s already reviewed hundreds of your drafts this season, I want to help you avoid that fate. So, here are the top 5 mistakes I see students make in their college essays, along with my expert advice on how to fix them.
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Mistake #1: Starting Off Weak
What it looks like:
Your essay kicks off with overused quotes or a generic “Ever since I was a child…” line, losing the reader from the get-go.
How to Fix it:
Begin with a strong, authentic hook that encapsulates who you are. Remember, admissions officers read thousands of essays – make yours stand out right from the start.
Mistake #2: Monotonous Writing
What it looks like:
Your essay sounds like a robot wrote it—same sentence structure, same tone, all the way through.
How to Fix it:
Vary your sentence structures. Mix short, punchy sentences with longer, more descriptive ones. It’ll keep the reader engaged and show off your writing chops.
Mistake #3: Being Too Abstract
What it looks like:
You’re waxing poetic about your love for science, but where’s the evidence?
How to Fix it:
Illustrate your points using vivid anecdotes, experiences, and metaphors. Instead of saying, “I’m passionate about biology,” paint the scene of that electrifying moment when the dance of cells under a microscope captivated you.
Mistake #4: Clinging to Irrelevant Details
What it looks like:
Your essay has this beautiful metaphor about a tree, but what does it have to do with the prompt?
How to Fix it:
It sounds harsh, but sometimes we must let go of beautiful sentences and anecdotes if they don’t serve the larger narrative. Be ruthless in your editing.
Mistake #5: Writing in a Vacuum
What it looks like:
You lock yourself in a room, crank out your essay, and submit it, never once getting a second opinion.
How to Fix it:
After you’ve gone through a few drafts, pass it to a trusted teacher, friend, or family member. Fresh eyes can provide insights you might have missed.
Next Steps
Remember, revising isn’t just about polishing—it’s about digging deep, understanding yourself better, and articulating your unique story in a way that resonates.
Pro-tip: Let your essay breathe. Revisit after a day or two. Fresh perspectives often highlight overlooked gems or inconsistencies!
Stuck? Or just need a second opinion? Schedule a free consultation and essay review here. I’m on standby to assist!
Keep writing, keep revising, and most importantly, write a story you believe in!
Shine on,
Kate
